ext_22341 ([identity profile] marinw.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] knitwitfics 2009-03-18 01:01 pm (UTC)

Jack tapped his wrist and held up two fingers--two minutes before the charges went off,

Jack and his hand signals. Loved that.

And THANK YOU for describing a concussion with some degree of accuracy (I think, I’ve only ever had a very mild one). Note to writers: Blows to the head are serious injuries. How many times have they knocked Jack (or someone else) out and then had him running around a few moments later perfectly healthy? That's a pet peeve of mine.

Carl sighed, shifting in his chair. "Leave no man behind, yeah?" Carl said, finally.

Oh, the foreshawding!

Great fic.


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